tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015912248402584135.post4789047611584018128..comments2012-12-01T12:34:05.418-08:00Comments on Barclay Davis's EDM310 Class Blog: Blog Assignment #6Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10461212726597382431noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015912248402584135.post-22645805982520806782012-10-18T10:58:49.542-07:002012-10-18T10:58:49.542-07:00Thank you so much for the critiques. I really do a...Thank you so much for the critiques. I really do appreciate when someone takes the time, like you did, to give my post an honest review. I will try to keep this comment in mind next time I post! Thank you again!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10461212726597382431noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015912248402584135.post-50475675868468441112012-10-18T10:50:22.364-07:002012-10-18T10:50:22.364-07:00Barclay,
I appreciate your honesty when talking ab...Barclay,<br />I appreciate your honesty when talking about your opinion when starting to watch the video- but I'm glad it changed! You did a great job relating to the post and I liked the way that you organized it into several main points. You addressed the main points well. I would suggest in the first paragraph, when you were talking about "childhood dreams", if you had explained "brick walls" in the context of goals and dreams, it would have tied together more neatly. I don't think you got off topic, it just wasn't as organized as how you started off.<br />Also, in the second paragraph, the first couple of sentences were powerful and inspired! Yet this sentence seemed unrelated: "Something that stuck with me was when he said, "There are two ways to say I don't know," but I think it could go with any question." I didn't not understand this question or what it had to do with the premise of the paragraph until I read "However, if I make them believe I am completely on board with whatever it is that they what to do they will move full steam ahead on achieving it." I think that you should have situated what you were saying, from the get go, under the premise of how we motivate students to be curious and innovative, which I think is what you were going for. I also liked that you brought up the idea of establishing trust and respectability with your students for this to work: "I know as a kid, and even now, I don't go to someone with something important to just anyone.." Although the wording was confusing and I think you may have forgotten to take a part out, I got what you were saying after I read it a couple of times. Your idea of letting your students write anonymous questions to help you self-reflect was a thoughtful and creative idea to show that you value their opinion! Kudos!<br />Some grammar mistakes to watch out for:<br />Be sure to use the proper tense of the word you mean; for example "giving" when I think you meant "given obstacles".<br />Also, in the following sentence I made some corrections in parentheses: "There may be some students (who) will not be interested in what I'm saying or teaching(,) but I cannot let that effect the way I treat or speak to them.."<br />Keep up the good work,<br />CarlyCarly Pughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03970808660406912537noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015912248402584135.post-54600474101171822372012-10-09T19:13:24.036-07:002012-10-09T19:13:24.036-07:00Hi Barclay!
I loved this video too. I watched it ...Hi Barclay! <br />I loved this video too. I watched it once and was completely sucked in. I had to watch it a second time to get the details that I needed to write about.<br />Your blog looks good! The only thing that I have to say is that you seem to get a little off track with your topics. Other than that, great job!<br />Meredith Meredith Andersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07804728366590611824noreply@blogger.com